Black Ghost

There it was hanging and gliding back and forth , the villain upside down hanging by a single rope that kept him alive. He was high hanging from a sky ...

This was interesting. More of a series of broken images than a coherent story, and the last line makes me wonder if this is a story at all, or just ...

9/10, looks intriguing.

Hi! I thought this was really good, you had good description throughout the story, and I thought the dream sequence was done well. Here's a few things I would take ...

Yay! I'm not confused anymore!

Hi, welcome to YWS! Romantic Fiction's not my thing but I'll try and take a look at your stuff. -Tony

Part Two Not too far off, maybe a half a mile away, there was a ranger’s station. Crystal had been there on one occasion last winter with Jerry when they ...

7/10, not sure what it means.

Hi Jake! I hope you have a good time here! What am I forgeting? Oh yeah. *magic* -Tony

Thanks again for all your comments! JCobsesed: Thanks for catching my insane usage of her name. While I was editing I made sure to cut down on that and now ...

Thanks for the comments, Sam! I knew something seemed off about my dialogue, and I think you nailed it with the child-syndrom thing. And after reading over it several times ...

Hi, it's really awesome here, I know you'll love it. Just PM me if you need someone to take a look at your work. -Tony

I try to see how long I can talk to him until he gets confused

8/10 It puts a smile on your face despite your mood. -Tony

Saphira: Sounds interesting, more like a drama than anything else. I would pick it up if I saw it on a self, but nothing more than a generalized drama comes ...